I recently was given a chance to get published by Mongoose Publishing to do a source book for their Traveller game...It's a fairly straight forward catalog, with plot seeds and NPCs for the various vessels I create.

fortunately they are using my art for concept art and have some folks doing renders of it for actual illustrations... :D

So....Here is a sample I did, I would love some feedback and any critiques you have.



Detailed write up using Mongoose Traveller High Guard rules
http://sta.sh/02543oj9ojwi

Wow, that looks awesome. Are you looking for feedback on the model or the write up?

Is this a spacecraft, aircraft, aerospacecraft or aerospace amphibious subterranean transformer? :P

it's a multi-role patrol corvette....not big enough to take on many other warships but designed for scouting, patrol, anti-piracy works.

the wings are part of the drive/control/sensor/electronic warfare systems..

and feed back on the ship, the write up, what I need to add, or delete from the write up.are all welcomed...I need as many outside opinions as I can get.

Quick comments... haven't gotten all the way through it.  I really don't know the technical aspects of the ship rules.  It has been a long time since I played Traveler or built ships, and I don't know that the rules I knew are the rules you are using in the first place.

I think the ship looks cool, and I like the stressing of sensors... in addition to potential atmospheric implications, the wings may provide for 'wider' sensor arrays allowing more accuracy.  They multiple wings may also help keep the sensors high quality even if one of the wings systems is damaged.

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Make your indentation consistent between paragraphs. Be consistent about use of colons and/or bolding in section headers:

I don't know if some of the things like the following are what you are asking for though:  (also I'm not a true editor, with respect to grammar, so someone may do a much better job)
Pg 2, P 2 "To protect itself, this class is"
Pg 2, P 8 Capitalize "While"
Pg 2, P 9 "In addition, it" ... " Only when engaged with" ... "damage.  To counter this threat, the"

Pg 2, p 10 "standards. Exposed"
Pg 2, p 12 "systems. As a  result, despite the highly advanced design of the ship, its interior"
Pg 2, P 13 "deployed well out from Depots and Stations" (do you mean "Deployed well out the way from"...
... "Often the vessel" ... " system. At which"

Pg 3, P 2 "investigate, landing" ... "Then remaining above and providing" ...
Pg 3, P 3 "These sweep"...

thanks for the feedback....I admit I need to run the ol' spell check and grammar check.but that's what i have a friend to do the proof reading and catch what I don't.

  The wings were one of the features I have got the most questions on...so I am planning on adding a more detailed explanation of their benefits. that was a rough draft so I am using feedback to fine tune my write up.

the Corvette itself has play tested pretty well, it became a very popular toy with the group I am running a play test at the local game store.

Hey, man, how's it going? Did your book get published and what are you working on next? I found this online, hope it provides some inspiration: http://dirkloechel.deviantart....Spaceships-398790051