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Posted by DM DarkchyldeFor group 0
Vash
GM, 12 posts
Wed 20 Aug 2008
at 05:44
  • msg #382

Re: Songs to DL

Are the Red Jump Suit Apparatus any good?
Zoul
GM, 135 posts
Wed 20 Aug 2008
at 06:30
  • msg #383

Re: Songs to DL

Yes, I really likee facee down and few more of there songs
PC Shimekiri
GM, 26 posts
Sat 6 Sep 2008
at 01:08
  • msg #384

Re: Songs to DL

Are you guys doing a novel or an RPG sourcebook?
Vash
GM, 20 posts
Sat 6 Sep 2008
at 01:50
  • msg #385

Re: Songs to DL

...um, as far as I'm concerned, it could be both. The notes and background info or whatnot that's lying around, doesn't make it into the novel, or is not fleshed out fully (based on the requirements of the novel) should be more than enough to put together the setting framework. However, everything is in VERY early stages right now, and it all depends on what my co-author, and head of the project, believes. But for me, I don't see why not, one lends itself to the other.
PC Shimekiri
GM, 27 posts
Sat 6 Sep 2008
at 02:05
  • msg #386

Re: Songs to DL

Let me know if you guys need art or a map or something.
Zoul
GM, 141 posts
Sun 7 Sep 2008
at 19:21
  • msg #387

Re: Songs to DL

Thanks, i'll keep that in mind. By the way any chance of your game being resurrected? I miss my Shalanzai killa *sniff* *sniff*
This message was last edited by the GM at 21:28, Sun 07 Sept 2008.
Zoul
GM, 144 posts
Fri 19 Sep 2008
at 16:56
  • msg #388

Re: Songs to DL

http://druid.wikispaces.com/Macro's+and+Addons





http://www.wowwiki.com/Druid_builds

Feral
Feral is the most popular druid leveling build, mostly due to low downtimes. This is a list of talents to choose while leveling in order, and why to choose them.

Ferocity 5/5
Essential talent. Reducing the cost of skills means you can use them more, which means increased DPS and therefore into faster leveling.
Brutal Impact 2/2
Can get you out of sticky situations by giving you extra time to heal or flee. Fewer deaths = Faster leveling!
Feral Instinct 3/3
The stealth bonus makes it easier to get to quest objectives more quickly. The threat increase is useful for tanking, especially in early instances.
Feral Swiftness 2/2
Faster movement speed means faster leveling!
Furor 5/5
Having 40 energy when you shift into cat form means you can immediately use an ability. Having 10 rage when shifting into bear form means you can immediately use Bash. Both of these mean higher survivability and lower down time.
Sharpened Claws 3/3
A big increase to crit change means increased DPS, which translates to faster leveling.
Primal Fury 2/2
2 combo points every time you crit with abilities that combo point abilities is excellent; finishing moves come much more quickly. The rage bonus makes endless Swipes possible, which is both good for tanking and killing multiple mobs at the same time.
Feral Charge 1/1
Useful as an interrupt and a way of preventing fleeing mobs from aggroing the ones around them.
Predatory Strikes 3/3
May not be a big attack power increase early on, but it's still something, and it's a requirement for one of the best Feral talents, so it's a must have.
Faerie Fire (Feral) 1/1
It's good, it's ranged, it's free from all costs. GREAT.
Shredding Attacks 1/2
At this point you're level 36 and have gotten Pounce. Taking this means you can open with: Pounce, Faerie Fire (Feral), (tick), Rake, (tick), Shred, which gets you three combo points before you've taken a hit. We'll take the other point in this when we get Mangle and replace Rake in this sequence.
Savage Fury 2/2
Straight DPS increase for faster leveling.
Heart of the Wild 5/5
One of the best talents in the feral tree. Good for both tanking, dpsing and solo leveling, at the same time! MUST HAVE!
Leader of the Pack 1/1
One point for 5% crit is great, plus your ranged and melee party members will thank you.
At this point you need 9 more points in the Feral tree to get Mangle. Make sure to get that last point in Shredding Attacks along the way. It may be worthwhile to respec at 50 for Mangle, then re-acquire Furor for the next five levels. At this point it's useful to pick up Naturalist and Omen of Clarity.
This message was last edited by the GM at 00:43, Sat 20 Sept 2008.
PC Shimekiri
GM, 28 posts
Thu 25 Sep 2008
at 11:15
  • msg #389

Re: Songs to DL

Zoul:
Thanks, i'll keep that in mind. By the way any chance of your game being resurrected? I miss my Shalanzai killa *sniff* *sniff*

You know, I would really like to. It's been a while. I might do some reworking though as it would possibly be only you and Hugh. Pat/Cytiss would be the only other one to play. The other two are out for sure.

Mainly it's about time for me. Between my IT job and art projects (I've had a ton of full color work for the L5R card game), plus having moved in with my girlfriend, there hasn't been a ton of writing time. I have plans though and the Shalanzai story is something I would like to incorporate into that future novel dream that I, along with every other DND player has=)
Zoul
GM, 146 posts
Sat 27 Sep 2008
at 16:14
  • msg #390

Re: Songs to DL

I hear that, I would love to play even if it means posting once a month. As to the project, I would recommend that you keep that dream alive; the difference between dreaming and doing is... well doing lol.

I recently moved out too and once I have PC moved which should be very, very soon, like today or tomorrow if-I-can-help-it-soon; I plan to do just that.

I’m glad to hear that you still have art gigs, your artwork rocks! But in any case you let me know what’s up and I will definitely work with it.
Zoul
GM, 150 posts
Sat 1 Nov 2008
at 14:36
  • msg #392

Re: Dont ask...

To the Empress alone did the Guard answer and where they appeared, they appeared as her hand a visible reminder of her power.

Scouts do not lie or exaggerate. Liars had their necks stretched by their fellows. A scout lived or died by what he saw or did not, so did others.

Guards do not kill other Guards very often and when they do it is by hanging. Treason is the only reason Guards are hung and lying on the border is treason. Even a small lie could endanger lives and it simply was not tolerated. Besides only cowards lie.

When I gave that to her she jokingly said she would wear it to the day she died.
This message was last edited by the GM at 16:43, Thu 06 Nov 2008.
Zoul
GM, 159 posts
Mon 1 Dec 2008
at 21:47
Zoul
GM, 162 posts
Sat 27 Dec 2008
at 14:20
  • msg #395

Yo Scotty

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This message was last edited by the GM at 14:29, Sat 27 Dec 2008.
PC Shimekiri
GM, 29 posts
Sat 27 Dec 2008
at 22:33
  • msg #396

Re: Yo Scotty

I've been doing a crap load of paintings for the L5R card game. Someone like the Crab Clan?
Zoul
GM, 163 posts
Sat 27 Dec 2008
at 22:36
  • msg #397

Re: Yo Scotty

Nice!

I'm actually a Scorpion fan myself but all the posters I found had the Crab. I have been scouring the net looking for good L5R art, but all I can find are the CCG pics and I don’t necessarily want CCG stats on my Scorpion Pics. Not feeling that at all.
PC Shimekiri
GM, 30 posts
Sun 28 Dec 2008
at 04:41
  • msg #398

Re: Yo Scotty

Drew Baker's site:
http://www.drewbaker.com
Zoul
GM, 164 posts
Sun 28 Dec 2008
at 08:22
  • msg #399

Re: Yo Scotty

Thats fucking awesome! Thanks<IMG SRC="http://forums.gleemax.com/images/smilies/jump.gif">
Zoul
GM, 166 posts
Tue 30 Dec 2008
at 00:33
  • msg #400

Re: Yo Scotty

No real reason to post this guys, cept that I wanted to kep somewhere for future reference. One of my characters is Jamaican after all:


One in 10 J'cans carry a knife, study shows

BY TANEISHA LEWIS Observer staff reporter lewist@jamaicaobserver.com
Monday, December 29, 2008



With Jamaica's murder toll spiralling past the 1,600 mark, a recent study has shown that close to 300,000 Jamaicans are arming themselves with protective devices, especially sharp implements.

According to the Health and Lifestyle Survey II (2007-2008) one in 10 Jamaicans carry a sharp implement such as a knife, with more men carrying protective weapons than women.

The study also showed that these implements are being used to injure and even kill at times with just about 10 per cent of the population reported having witnessed a stabbing incident most frequently, followed by a shooting incident and then domestic disputes.

"Shooting was witnessed more by females, while more males witnessed stabbings," Damian Francis, research group member, said as he presented the injuries component of the survey recently.
Statistics from the Jamaica Constabulary Force (JCF) show that over 170 people were stabbed to death since the beginning of the year. That same data also cites the knife as the second most common weapon used to carry out murders. The gun is the first.
The study, which surveyed 2,848 people between the ages of 15 and 74, said nine per cent of the population reported having serious injuries. It also revealed that 30 per cent of serious injuries in the past year required hospitalisation.

"These injuries represent the largest preventable cause of use of the health care service and therefore present a problem," Francis said. "Violence-related injuries are now the third major cause of death in Jamaica and account for 10 per cent of mortality worldwide. According to the Jamaica injury surveillance system, 52 per cent of injuries reported in 1999 to 2000 were violence-related and 15 per cent motor-vehicle related."

At the same time, Francis said unintentional injuries occurred more frequently among males than females and more frequently among the 25-44 age group.

"Twelve per cent of Jamaicans reported having a serious injury in the past five years and eight per cent reported a serious injury in the past year," he said. "Serious injury in the past five years and serious injury in the past year was more frequent among males than females."

Meantime, the study showed that less than two per cent of the population said they participated in a violent act, with more male perpetrators than females. Seventy-three per cent of persons who had participated in a violent act reported that this was a fight, followed by domestic disputes at 24 per cent.

Ironically, only two per cent of Jamaicans reported that they considered their community dangerous and the majority, 67 per cent, considered their community to be safe.
Zoul
GM, 167 posts
Fri 2 Jan 2009
at 23:21
  • msg #401

Re: Yo Scotty

Lyrics to I Fucked Your Girl :
[Intro:]
Ah our gal
Oooh, girl sey she like wen di cocky reach har
Girl sey she like it
She nuh business if har boyfriend wan fi fight it
Haha haha

[Chorus:]
I fucked your girl and she like it
Di whole night she a ride pan my dick
All you ah watch di pussy you can fight it
She nah stop front yah till yuh bite it
I fucked your girl and she like it
Di whole night she a ride pan my dick
All you ah watch di pussy you can fight it
She nah stop from sey you

[Verse 1:]
Open dis an pop down
Wen mi ah wuk gal dem drop down
Early morning to noon dem lock down
Boyfriend call fone an can get her
Mi sey window di bwoy dem lock down
Ah mi ah wrestle di pussy like ah smackdown
Everlasting fuck can not done
Gal ah bawl wen she get di length
She wan wear it round she neck like platinum

[Chorus:]
I fucked your girl and she like it
Di whole night she a ride pan my dick
All you ah watch di pussy you can fight it
She nah stop front yah till yuh bite it
I fucked your girl and she like it
Whole night she a ride pan my dick
All you ah watch di pussy you can fight it
She nah stop complain
So gal

[Verse 2:]
Wine pun di edge gal wine up
If yuh little an short jus climb up
Caw yuh kno sey yuh pum pum good
An yuh nuh buss yuh nah push crime up
Nuh man neva get fed up sey yuh time up
Yuh kno how fi live inna yuh time up
Fuck har mek she grip di pillow an wiggle like ah caterpillar

[Chorus:]
I fucked your girl and she like it
Di whole night she a ride pan my dick
All you ah watch di pussy you can fight it
She nah stop front yah till yuh bite it
I fucked your girl and she like it
Di whole night she a ride pan my dick
All you ah watch di pussy you can fight it

[Bridge:]
Ah hour gal, ah hour gal
Mi ride har, mi ride har, mi ride har
Mi, mi ride har
Fi more dan ah hour gal, ah hour gal

[Verse 1:]
Open dis an pop down
Wen mi ah wuk gal dem drop down
Early morning to noon dem lock down
Boyfriend call fone an can get her
Mi sey window di bwoy dem lock down
Ah mi ah wrestle di pussy like ah smackdown
Everlasting fuck can not done
Gal ah bawl wen she get di length
She wan wear it round she neck like platinum

[Chorus:]
I fucked your girl and she like it
Di whole night she a ride pan my dick
All you ah watch di pussy you can fight it
She nah stop front yah till yuh bite it
I fucked your girl and she like it
Whole night she a ride pan my dick
All you ah watch di pussy you can fight it
She nah stop complain

[Chorus:]
I fucked your girl and she like it
Di whole night she a ride pan my dick
All you ah watch di pussy you can fight it
[ I Fucked Your Girl Song on http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-wYtj6jNPO8 ]
This message was last edited by the GM at 00:05, Sat 03 Jan 2009.
Vash
GM, 26 posts
Sun 4 Jan 2009
at 00:08
  • msg #402

Re: Yo Scotty....and the rest of the Junk you post here.

*Looks at the stuff myky has been posting*

DUDE....WHISKEY TANGO FOXTROT...?!?!

...btw, BLESS for the drewbaker.com link.
Andredi Mizzrym
GM, 27 posts
faerunian Drow
Super Killa
Sun 4 Jan 2009
at 03:09
  • msg #403

Re: Yo Scotty....and the rest of the Junk you post here.

Whiskey Tango Foxtrot indeed. Lima Oscar Lima
Zoul
GM, 169 posts
Thu 15 Jan 2009
at 01:21
  • msg #404

MRF: More Random Fuckery

Ejection

/startattack
#showtooltip Chains of Ice
/cast Chains of Ice
/cast Death Grip

Try to press it twice in a row really quickly. It will make the target fly up into the air at a very slow rate (depending on movement speed of the mob), and eventually fall down at a very slow rate. The target can be attacked while in the air, and it serves as a great crowd control, and it only uses one Frost rune. It is more effective the further away you are from your target. Can be used constantly (or near constant) with the Unholy Command talent. Can be used on most mobs.


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Runner Stopper

/startattack
#showtooltip Death Grip
/cast Death Grip
/cast Chains of Ice

Casts Death Grip. If Death Grip is on cooldown, Chains of Ice is casted instead. This allows for you to either pull, or stop an enemy from running away with the use of one button.


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Ghoul Death Coil on Alt

#showtooltip Death Coil
/cast [nomodifier] Death Coil; [modifier:alt,target=pet] Death Coil

Casts a standard Death Coil with no modifier pressed down. With the ''Alt'' key held down, uses Death Coil on your pet rather than your target for healing instead of damage.


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Rune Strike Macros
/startattack
#showtooltip Blood Strike
/cast Rune Strike
/cast Blood Strike


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/startattack
#showtooltip Heart Strike
/cast Rune Strike
/cast Heart Strike


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/startattack
#showtooltip Scourge Strike
/cast Rune Strike
/cast Scourge Strike


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/startattack
#showtooltip Icy Touch
/cast Rune Strike
/cast Icy Touch


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Ranged Ghoul Stun

/castsequence Leap, Gnaw


Unholy DPS Spamable Macro

/startattack
/castsequence reset=6/combat/shift Icy Touch, Plague Strike, Scourge Strike, Blood Strike, Blood Strike, Death Coil, Scourge Strike, Death Coil, Scourge Strike, Scourge Strike, Death Coil
/script UIErrorsFrame:Clear()


"Jihad" Pet Macro (for Unholy)
/target pet
/cast Corpse Explosion
/targetlasttarget


/startattack
#showtooltip Plague Strike
/cast Rune Strike
/cast Plague Strike


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/startattack
#showtooltip Death Strike
/cast Rune Strike
/cast Death Strike


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/startattack
#showtooltip "Rune Ability"
/script UIErrorsFrame:UnregisterEvent("UI_ERROR_MESSAGE")
/cast "Rune Ability"



"Attack" Pet Macro (Shift+Forward-Mousewheel)
#showtooltip Gnaw
/cast [target=focus,exists,harm,nodead] Gnaw; Gnaw

"Retreat" Pet Macro (Shift + Backward-Mousewheel)
#showtooltip Leap
/target YOUR_DKs_NAME_HERE
/cast Leap
/petpassive
/petdefensive
/targetlasttarget


-cast lichborne then this macro and you are a death knight healer!
/cast [target=self] Death Coil

-Will cast Strangulate the mob your mouse is hovering over, without changing your current target. Useful for getting stray caster mobs to run to you/the tank/the AoE. -
/cast [target=mouseover] Strangulate
Zoul
GM, 171 posts
Fri 23 Jan 2009
at 21:44
Zoul
GM, 177 posts
Fri 6 Feb 2009
at 18:26
  • msg #406

Re: MRF: More Random Fuckery

Please forward them here darkchylde.kindred@gmail.com

treiz_khushrenada@yahoo.co.uk sent 2/5/2009 8:32 PM:
BACKWARDS ON TOAST
treiz_khushrenada@yahoo.co.uk sent 2/5/2009 7:52 PM:
sorry
treiz_khushrenada@yahoo.co.uk sent 2/5/2009 5:11 PM:
mhm
Myky says:
?
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
? what?
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
away from the phone
Myky says:
Ok I wanted to say to use acronyms in the sake of saving time while we discuss this proposal for RP services
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
kk
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
That's fine with me
Myky says:
So read the section on taking the initiative and all that entails and I was very impressed with the way they handled it
Myky says:
I think this package will suit our needs nicely
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
I must agree
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
in fact, I would go so far as to say that it is exactly what I was looking for based on our initial assessment. I will, however, ensure to reread the mentioned section, just so that I am totally aware of all the little details.
Myky says:
I would like to reinforce that assessment and will do the same on my end as I was reading the document late into the night due a hectic work day.
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
understood
Myky says:
My major concern is your location and what that entails with the majority of out business being conducted in kinsgton
Myky says:
do you forsee a problem inthis area?
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
hmm, not really. I should be able to attain regular transport to kingston, as well as a steady lodging and meeting quarters, have begun to make inquiries in that area. However, if this proves to be more problematic than foreseen, will inform and seek alternatives.
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
Myself took an early night, it having been a rough few days on my end. However, was back up at three this morning and have been working on and off since then.
treiz_khushrenada@yahoo.co.uk sent 2/6/2009 12:46 PM:
I completed the initial read through of the first piece of the proposal, and I am impressed with the overall Character of it, particularly where the Creation of opportunities are mentioned. The initial areas, and their derivatives are very sensible, in particular the way the Points are Spread out. Very intuitive.
Myky says:
As I have mnetioned in the past, I can arrange for accomadations if you have trouble in this area.
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
ok
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
noted
Myky says:
I completely agree with your above assessment and I have myself put it to the test. I was completely satisfied with the results... in fact that is an understatement
Myky says:
I do understand your need to have all parties present for an initial meeting to ensure that we ARE ALL ON TEH SAME PAGE and look forward toteh same, are we still on to met this weekend?
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
Most definitely
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
If I am unable to be there today, I will be there tomorrow early, and seek to arrange a daytime with said parties to assess their readiness for this undertaking. Then, we can have a proper meeting, sometime tomorrow evening or on the following day to discuss the documents design reccomendations, and maybe create some options, and begin to see how it will play out.
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
daytime sitdown*
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
brb
Myky says:
When you get back please let me know if I need to be at the Half Way tree office to meet with you early tomorrow?
treiz_khushrenada@yahoo.co.uk sent 2/6/2009 12:59 PM:
That won't be necessary, I'll more than likely be accompanying my partner to her usual lodgings, after which I will contact you and the other parties, and arrange the first sit down. Transport has already been arranged, through the usual channels. Thanks though, that might be necessary in future.
Myky says:
Not a problem, we are very flexible and will do what we can to accomodate you tomorrow or at any point in teh future as we truly appreciate your business
Myky says:
In keeping with the Character of the transaction wold you like to me to print the necessarry Sheets for the perusal/use of the other clients and yourself tomorrow?
Myky says:
Would it be possible for you to bring me the Supplementary forms tomorrow? I know you have issues with your office printer and I have no problem with a soft copy if you could provide the same via email or jump drive. I believe these Supplements will go a long way in helping us convince your other partners about the superior service being offered to them.
treiz_khushrenada@yahoo.co.uk sent 2/6/2009 1:16 PM:
I am about to read the documents example design, having thoroughly browsed the initial instructions since earlier today. After this, I will be proceeding apace to their indepth  options for personalization, looking Professional reccomendations, before going in depth as to the Skills that will be needed.
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
I have two of the Supplementary forms with me, soft copy will be no problem....and yes, I would so appreciate several copies of the necessary Sheets, that would speed things up greatly.
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
I must apologise, I was called away by my boss just now.
Myky says:
I have already perused those sections and will happy to offer my input should you have any questions of need clarifications. There is even a website that already answers some of the questions that may pop up
Myky says:
Thats quite alright i completely understand as I must speak with my own boss now. a moment
Myky says:
SORRY ABOUT THAT
Myky says:
caps sorry
Myky says:
Ok I will print and take the necessarry paperwork with me.
Myky says:
Would you be so kind as to send the Supplements to my account. Please check OCC RPOL for the address if you dont already have it
treiz_khushrenada@yahoo.co.uk sent 2/6/2009 1:28 PM:
Will do
treiz_khushrenada@yahoo.co.uk sent 2/6/2009 1:28 PM:
not a problem
treiz_khushrenada@yahoo.co.uk sent 2/6/2009 1:30 PM:
Though, as I have already stated, I am a little leery of intermixing the supplementary information with the original document. It is very comprehensive in and of itself, presenting several choices that I would like to explore indepth, before we muddy the waters, so to speak.
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
I, for one, would like a comprehensive exploration of all the project has to offer, before we move in such directions...though I have no doubt that there are reccomendations for the proper addition of the info contained therein.
Myky says:
I concur yet it is always good to have the information on hand in case the need for them arises, you can never tell with new clients
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
Very true.
Myky says:
After all we plan on doing business with them in the future and it would be good to educate them as to what the product is cable of; even if they don’t utilize it to fullest at the outset they will appreciate the fact that there is room for growth.
treiz_khushrenada@yahoo.co.uk sent 2/6/2009 1:35 PM:
Very true...as always your advice is good.
Myky says:
Thank you
Myky says:
Is there anything else you would like to discuss about the project?
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
Not at this time, but as soon as I come across anything unclear you will be notified. Thanks again for all your invaluable help.
Myky says:
There is one thing, I may have to take out a sub contract for a sub account as Mr. Scott-Stewart is showing keen interest in the project. If that is the case i was wondering if you would like to take part in that venture, not in your regular capacity but more of supporting role. I dont need an answer now as we are in the preliminary negotiations and he might not take service but I would like you
Myky says:
to keep it in mind
Myky says:
If he does accept the terms we do business eletronically for the most part using rpol and other mediums to facilitate the vast transfer of information
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
That would be best for us, yes. I am definitely interested, particularly if this sub account can generate Constant, if not necessarily Regular returns. I have had similar problems in the past, and understand the nature of the problem, and as always, you would have my full support.
Myky says:
Thank you, I appreciate it, I really do. But like I said this is not concrete and may not pan out
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
All right.
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
Understood
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
The Supplementary info has been archived and sent.
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
As soon as there are updates to said info, I will endeavour to acquire them, and pass it on to you.
Myky says:
although teh service is the same, the applications may be different as I forsee a lot of Tagging being used and very little mechanical support being utilized
Myky says:
Thanks for that
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
Very true, very true....regrettable that. Do not allow it to render your own views of the overall structure skewed, remember the clients history.
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
Not a problem.
Myky says:
Oh this is my sell point for the product ue to clients history, he may prefer to take mech. support in any event as he has some experience in that field as well. If memory serves; that was how he got into this business. I am impressed with the package though so used it to sell the overall product, knowing it to be more impressive than the mechanical aspect which is more familiar with and thus find
Myky says:
finds it less impressive
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
True
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
Ok, I can see why you would take that tack, and I leave it in your capable hands to ensure that the finished product provides a Balanced viewpoint. If that account persists, do you forsee it spawning any other business, maybe with other clients that operate in Mr. Scott-Stewarts area of business?
Myky says:
It is possible but not likely as the other possible client has expressed a severe dislike to doing business online and reluctance to follow up with the necessarry paperwork or even reading documents that have been submitted in the past. While I look forward to additional business, i am wary and not overly optimistic
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
Ok. Sounds troublesome.
Myky says:
yes thats the word
Myky says:
Please note that I will take on the trouble this additional client will bring for the sake of the business but I will not try to coerce him into taking the service. I have sent him the documents and expressed an interest in the same, it is up to him to come to us if he wishes to move on the next step in the activation process.
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
Ok
 Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
Hopefully this new product, and its potential for revenues, will be enough to influence his continued services.
Myky says:
Indeed
Myky says:
If you have further quesries please contact me by phone
Why fear death? I'm afraid of stupidity myself..... says:
will do
This message was last edited by the GM at 22:10, Fri 06 Feb 2009.
Vash
GM, 28 posts
Fri 6 Feb 2009
at 18:37
  • msg #407

Re: MRF: More Random Fuckery

Will do.
Vash
GM, 31 posts
Mon 21 Dec 2009
at 21:53
  • msg #408

Re: MRF: More Random Fuckery

Ok, minor points out of the way.

As with all first drafts, needs editing for grammar and some points of spelling.

Moving on from that...

The sentences and flow are abrupt. They seem to stop in mid thought, pick up in mid thought and the transference from sentence to sentence is abrupt. Don't be so literal when describing items from the setting rules, such as the belt of giant strength, or talking about Wondrous Items or whatnot. This takes the reader out of the story, reminding them that they ARE reading a piece set in a pre-conceived game world for which printed rules exist, instead of pulling them in deeper. Suckage. Same with the Kundarak vaults, as well as fixing that sentence to explain why they were so special.

LOVE the way you explain his nickname, very slick.

Avoid using adverbs, words that end in -ly. They are adverbs of manner, and pepper the works of inadequate authors who can't/won't let their writing get the sense/manner intended across.

clearly you were writing this in haste, you skip some character actions and entire chunks of sentences. Not a criticism, just noting it.

'They were a motley crew of disparate souls.' I get what you are saying here, but the two adjectives give separate ideas about the group that clashes in my mind, they're both dominant, where I think one should be dominant and one enhancing.

Okay, flow. Your ideas come across all jumbled up with each other. Example: 'Three humans were seated in the black settees that were strewn about the room creating an orderly and pleasing décor.' This is a lesser example, as this actually manages to flow into the next few sentences about the Aberrant dragon marks, very nice, and then the description of the humans. You need to separate these ideas, in that set the scene then let your characters inhabit them. If you were trying to set the scene and the characters as you go, a little more nuance is needed.

'They were all carried an Aberrant mark, each with (a) different ability that would leave their prey dead or worse.' - Love that sentence, says what it needs to say in style and moves on.

'He gestured with his right hand and a Spyglass appeared out of thin air in his fist.'

or

He gestured and a spyglass appeared in his hand. DnD and all these books teach us about fluff. All the reading I've done encourages concision. ;)

He put it to his eye to get a closer look at the ship they were about to rob. The name emblazoned on the side was “White Swan” and indeed it was white with a Swan’s head at the prow and stylized upswept wings at the sides, doubling as the support of the bound fire elemental that ringed the ship to provide locomotion.

TOO MUCH IN THESE TWO SENTENCES. CLOGGED WITH INFO, REVISE PLEASE. Thank you. Spread it out, work it into the ongoing descriptions or rework these two sentences.

Aeden is the elf one minute, Aeden the next.

Again, ideas jumbled together in the last paragraph.

I like the crew, and the clear set up for high flying hijinks that are sure to ensue. I like skip, though his mother is a bit stereotypical. I like the little we see of his uncle as well and his character. It has a lot of potential, can't wait to see the characters interact, particularly the goblins and the bugbear. All in all I like it, please finish it and send it on once it's done.
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